Friday, September 14, 2007

Formal Writing #2 [La Paz]

El articulo sobre voces de la paz. Este un día internacional de la paz en Colombia. Los colombianos les gustan preventar violencias en las comunidades y mejorar sus vidas. En la ceremonia del día internacional de la paz, el secretario toca la compara de la paz. La ceremonia celebra en 21 de Septiembre. Antes de ceremonia, el secretario pronuncia un mensaje de paz y pide que se guarde un minuto. Por concluido, los dos artículos son similares cuando sobre paz. Dos artículos quieren paz en nuestro mundo.
Pienso que el día de paz es muy importante porque todos no necesitan violencias. Necesitamos paz en todos partes del mundo. Paz es muy bien y ojala que nosotros recibimos paz en nuestra vida.

Name:
rizal
Date:
12/17/07
Assignment:
formal writing #2
Before writing, I think of what I know about the topic. I make a list of ideas, words, and phrases I might use.
yes


I organize my thoughts and ideas so that I can focus on one central idea.
yes


I choose ideas and examples that are appropriate for this culture.
yes


I make sure the writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
yes


I try to make my writing interesting.
yes


I write a first draft and then I reread and revise.
yes


I check to make sure that my writing makes sense.
yes


I make sure the sentences relate to each other.
yes


I use familiar language structures so I know I am writing correctly.
yes


If I do not know a word, I use a word or phrase I do know.
yes


I make sure punctuation is correct according to the rules in this language.
yes


I check my spelling.
yes


I check my use of verb tenses (present, past, future, etc.).
yes


I check my use of gender and agreements (masculine, feminine, neuter).
yes


I ask someone who knows the language (classmate) to read my writing and give me feedback.
yes


I make sure the final copy is legible (handwritten or typed).
yes


What I think I did very well on in this assignment:
my writing about peace was very good though there are some errors

What I think I need to focus/improve on next time:
I think i should have written more about peace and about my opinion about this matter.

2 comments:

Kristina said...

Student Writer:
Rizal
Student Reviewer:
Kristina
Assignment:
Formal writing 2
Date:
12/17/07
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5

The central theme of the writing is clear.
5

The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5

The assignment is interesting to read.
4

There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
5

The sentences relate to each other.
4

The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
4

The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
4

The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5

The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5

The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
4

The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4

The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
4


What I really liked about this assignment:
i liked the ideas about peace!



Some suggestions for next time:
make it longer

KyraMadison said...

Writing Rubric: Peer-Assessment
Student Writer:
Rizal
Student Reviewer:
Christine
Assignment:
Formal Writing #2
Date:
12-17-07
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5

The central theme of the writing is clear.
5

The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5

The assignment is interesting to read.
5

There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
5

The sentences relate to each other.
5

The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5

The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
5

The writer uses punctuation correctly.
4

The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
4

The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
4

The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4

The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
4

What I really liked about this assignment:
I liked how you talk about the different aspects of the day of peace.

I have the following questions about your assignment:

Some suggestions for next time:
Check your punctuation and cite the fuentes.

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